成考英语作文:2015年湖北卷写作二

       一、2015年湖北卷真题回放
　　
　　请根据以下提示,并结合具体事例,用英语写一篇短文。
　　
　　Questioning is a bridge to learning. When you begin to doubt something and search for an answer, you will learn.
　　
　　注意:1.无须写标题；2.除诗歌外,文体不限；3.内容必须结合你生活中的具体事例；4.文中不得透露个人姓名和学校名称；5.词数不少于120,如引用提示语则不计入总词数。(满分30分)
　　
　　Seeing is believing①.Never believe in anything in a hurry before you make a careful research.
　　
　　From childhood,I was told the saying the great fish eat up the small. I had been taking it for granted until one day when I knew the saying is not always right②.Last year, my father bought me a pet fish as my birthday present with some shrimps as its food.I kept them together in the fish tank, watching them swimming free and happy③.However, later in the afternoon,I was surprised to find it was the fish that was dying. And the killers, the shrimps were chewing on the body④!
　　
　　So we should have the courage to question,and on no account should we follow anyone like sheep. The more we question, the more we will learn⑤.
　　
　　二、满分范文
　　
　　A man becomes learned by asking questions.In many cases, it is by questioning that we know something clear and learn more and more about the world①.
　　
　　When I was 12 years old②,I studied in a junior middle school. The subjects became more and more difficult. Frequently, I got confused even about the answers③. However, I was very shy and didn't dare to ask for further explanation. Later my class teacher found my problem and gave me constant encouragement.Day,I enjoyed questioning④,not only knowing the answer but also understanding why it is so.
　　
　　From this experience I know that no man is born wise or learned. By questioning what is uncertain or not understood⑤,one can make himself more clear-headed and learned.
　　
　　三、解析：
　　
　　①that引导的定语从句进一步解释questioning的重要性,语句内容丰富,逻辑力强。
　　
　　②when引导的时间状语从句前置,自然过渡至讲述事件方面，作者深谙文句过渡之道。
　　
　　③frequently属很棒的过渡词,文章结构得以增强。got confused用法纯正地道。作者词汇量和写作技巧得以充分展示。
　　
　　④day by day一天天的。作者表达方式十分新颖独特,且符合英文行文习惯,无论作为过渡短语还是正文,运用十分巧妙。
　　
　　⑤that引导的宾语从句,详细阐述从这件事中所获感想。高级句式表达准确,内容丰富息量大,作者运用复合句能力令人佩服。
　　
　　四、名师点评
　　
　　根据高考英语写作评分原则,内容要点为最基本要求,语法、词汇为提升要素,结构布局决定分数。纵观此篇写作,本文在这三方面做得完成的非常成功。when、frequently、however、day by day、from this experience等过渡词或链接短语使文章结构紧凑,行文连贯,读起来朗朗上口,颇具阅读美感。内容上文章涵盖了所有要点,语法方面作者熟练运用各种复杂句式和多种表达方式,结构采用经典的三段式写作,条理清晰,逻辑合理,可谓臻美。总之,这篇写作十分出彩!
　　
　　五、译文
　　
　　不耻下问才能有学问。在多数情况下,通过质疑我们才能清楚地了解事物,并对世界了解得越来越多。
　　
　　在我12岁的时候,我在一所初中学习。学科变得越来越困难。我频繁地对答案感到困惑。然而,我很害羞,不敢要求进一步的解释。后来班主任发现了我的问题,给了我不断的鼓励。一天天地,我乐意提问,不仅仅只知答案,而且理解为什么会这样。
　　
　　从这次经历中我知道,没有人天生是聪明的或博学的。通过询问哪些不确定或不理解的事情,一个人可以让自己头脑更清醒,更博学。