成考英语作文:以《班规》谈想法的范文二

       一、成考英语作文真题回放内容
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　　阅读下面短文,然后按照要求写一篇150词左右的英语短文。
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　　On the first day of her work, Sally found that a class full of problems was waiting for her; six teachers had quit before her. When she walked into the classroom,it was chaos: two boys were fighting in the far corner, yet the rest of the class seemed not to notice them; some girls were chatting and some were running about; paper,food packages and other garbage were littered around. Just when she was about to speak, a student rushed in and pushed her aside! He was twenty minutes late!
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　　Sally walked onto the platform, picked up a piece of chalk and wrote on the blackboard: Rule 1: We are family! All students stopped to look at her. And she continued with Rule 2, Rule 3... In the following weeks, sally worked out 10 class rules and posted them on the walls of the classroom. She patiently explained all the rules to the students and required everyone to follow them.
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　　Surprisingly, Sally was not driven out like the former teachers; instead, she won respect from the students.Over the year, she witnessed gradual change in the class.At the graduation ceremony, Just as she expected. she was very proud to stand with a class of care, manners and confidence.
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　　[写作内容]
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　　1.用约30个词概括上文的主要内容。
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　　2.用约120个词就班规谈谈你的想法,内容包括:(1)你们班最突出的问题是什么?(2)针对该间题你会设计一条什么班规?(3)你认为班规会带来什么影响?
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　　[写作要求]
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　　1.作文中可以使用亲身经历或虚构的故事,也可以参照阅读材料的内容，但不得直接引用原文的句子。
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　　2.作文中不得出现真实姓名和学校名称。
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　　二、成考英语作文范文
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　　From the passage we know when Sally found there were so many problems among her new students,she didn't lose heart.She made some rules full of love and respect to manage"her students.In return,her students took on a completely new look.
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　　When it comes to my class, I have to say that I can't stand some classmates' whisper to others when the teachers are presenting knowledge.Maybe they are showing interest in what is explained but most of the time, they are talking about something having nothing to do with the contents of the class. They may disturb the teachers' thought.Worst of all,they show no respect to our teachers. For the phenomenon, I propose to make a rule which says We Are Friends. We all hope to have more friends. But it's hard for us to make true friends.
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　　I believe when we remember the rule,we remind ourselves that being the best listener is the first step to have friends. Our teachers are our friends. I believe all the classmates will not interrupt the teachers when they remember the rule.
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　　三、成考英语作文范文解析:
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　　①when引导了一个时间状语从句,详细阐述事件经过,高度概括文章主题。678招生考试网认为among介词短语用的十分传神。
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　　②In return是很棒的连接短语。本句十分符合逻辑,作者写作极具条理性。
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　　③长句含有多个从句:that引导的宾语从向,When引导的时间状语从句,高级句式为文章添彩。678招生考试信息网认为whisper运用极为精妙,准确讲述了上课时耳语的镜头。
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　　④worst of all不仅仅是过渡词,还突出了递进效果,文章立显层次感。
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　　⑤which引导的非限定性定语从句,进一步解释rule,文章内容详实,符合逻辑。
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　　⑥I believe开启的总结句内含多亮点: Interrupt属高级词汇,when引导的时间状语从句。678招生信息网认为作者写作能力可见一斑。
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　　四、成考英语作文范文点评
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　　这篇佳作紧密围绕命题提示展开,30多个词的短文高度概括了材料内容,足见作者能力出众。正文部分,作者详细讲述了自己班级存在的问题,分析成因,并给出了合理的、符合实际的建议。且最后部分有相信新规会起到积极作用。文章布局有点题,有详释,有建议,有感想,可谓结构合理,条理清晰。加上多个高级勺式的运用,使文章说服力大增,文章层次立刻提升很多。辅以多条短句的配合,文章错落有致,可读感很强。总之,这篇作文无论是结构还是内容,语法还是思想,都做得十分完美。
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　　五、成考英语作文范文译文
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　　从文章中我们知道,莎丽发现她的新学生们有这么多问题,她并没有失去信心。她对“管理”她的学生制定了一些充满爱和尊重的规则。作为回报,她的学生们展现了一个全新的面貌。
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　　谈到我的课堂,我不得不说,当老师们在传授知识时,我不能忍受一些同学和别人说悄悄话。也许他们对所说内容很感兴趣,但大多数时候,他们在谈论与课堂内容无关的事情。他们可能会扰乱老师的思维。最糟糕的是,他们带给我们老师不尊重。对于这种现象,我建议制定一条规则,就是“我们是朋友”。我们都希望有更多的朋友。但是我们很难交到真正的朋友。
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　　我相信,当我们记住这条规则时,我们提醒自己,做最好的倾听者是拥有朋友的第一步。我们的老师是我们的朋友。我相信所有的同学在记住规则时都不会打断老师。